That may sound like a pretty easy thing - but is it? If you are a solo musician or if you are part of a distinct group that makes up a band, it's simple. But what about the keyboard player who always plays on your records and at your live shows but hasn't officially been asked to join the band? What if you write all the songs and think of it as your project, but you always have the same musicians backing you up? Before you can write a bio, you need to know whose bio you're writing, so decide who gets a bio mention and who is essentially a session musician .
I am no expert in writing a bio and have not researched this subject at all – with that said, I do have two suggestions which are to replace “I wish” with stronger words/language (some type of “this is how I can help you” statement). And, the other suggestion is to remove the “I love coffee” at the end. I totally get that you want to add that human touch but it’s not distinct enough of a statement (as many people love coffee) – if this makes any sense. In my opinion, that last statement should be somewhat of a “wow” statement – such as “I like to bungie-jump in my free time” (I know that’s a lame example…but it’s less common than I like coffee). Or, you could leave out the human/personal statement from your bio all together – I think your picture is your personal statement.
Everyone wants your bio to be shorter. The shorter your bio, the more people will read it. No one is impressed by a long series of unimpressive things. If you have a great one sentence bio, people will be curious enough to find out more. On the other hand, if you have a bad and long bio they are certain never to want to learn anything about you. When you are famous enough to appear on TV or write an article for The New York Times, your by-line will be a few words long: Author. Senator. Musician. Keep this in mind. The goal is to make your bio shorter, not longer.